never asking someone
(not just anyone)
for love
for me --
just me.
needing
to be a priority
to someone
(not just anyone)
but
afraid that someone
(not just anyone)
would rather leave
than sacrifice anything
for me
and
unable to tell someone
(not just anyone)
what i crave --
for wondering
if it was freely given
or
borrowed against love
would cheapen the gift
and leave the true need
unfulfilled.
thus
my silence
is ever an invitation
for someone
(not just anyone)
to read my heart.
~ ~ ~
04/07/05 by The_Fool
Hard sometimes to know whether you can ask for love and get something back that is as honest as love freely given without the hint. As far as style, I was trouble at first by the someone (not just anyone phrasing, but the more I read it, the more I liked it because of the rhythmic repetition.
04/07/05 by CrimsonMaiden
I can relate to the words of this poem. You say it so eloquently. :)
04/07/05 by Bridget69 in Canada
speaks volumes about the silent need to be noticed and loved.
04/07/05 by Anonymous
this is lovely. The title is perfect. ~Syn
04/08/05 by matriarch
of that sometimes overpowering yearning, that desire for someone (not just anyone) to love you........it resonates deeply inside me, and echoes my own enforced mute state. A powerful, yet gentle piece. Mat xxxx
04/08/05 by Belegon in Southern California
...and a solid piece about the uncertainties we all face in relationships both old and new, casual and formal, defined and open to interpretation. This resonates within me.
04/08/05 by rikaaim in Ohio, USA
Because I'm on the other side of your poem I know what you mean. I am the "not just anyone". Sadly. I hope your "not just anyone" sees how special you really are and does decide to sacrafice anything for you. I have made that choice for my special someone and have never been happier. I know they would do the same for me and your poem shows the same in you. You would sacrafice anything for this person. You express perfectly the emotions as well as the imagery of what your trying to convey. The format lends itself well to your point...allowing the reader short intermissions to really "think" about what you are saying. By leaving in the small gaps, one can't overlook any of the detail your trying to impress. Well done.
04/08/05 by Anonymous
touched close to home with this one...very well done. Sabina
04/08/05 by LadyJeanne
Your work never fails to reach me. I can identify with the silence - not wanting to ask, fearing to ask, hoping you don't have to ask - and the belief that love is, or should be, freely given. Thanks, Imp. LJ
04/08/05 by sophia jane
I relate to this completely. Well done, Imp!
04/08/05 by Wanton Vixxxen in Misty eyed in Pennsy...
could write this exquisite piece and make it reach out from the screen and tug at the heart like you can, imp. I still feel the heart's strings pulling as I write the comment. Simply beautiful! Vixxx
04/08/05 by My Erotic Tail
could write such a masterpiece, a real pearl of a poem, I am totally impressed
04/09/05 by Anonymous
Painful, lonely and gray is this work. Lost in the pugatory of a desperate voice... powerful in the simplicity of the desires that all hold so close to their souls.. very well done Imp.. Du Lac~
12/22/05 by Miss Oatlash
The last stanza left me breathless.
02/20/07 by angelicminx in love with the man of my dreams
My silence has been broken, however, because I have found my someone (not just anyone)... or should I say he's found me. :) ~Minx
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