never / enough

The knife of never
forever cuts
as you hold me ever
in the stasis of hope

Ever close enough
to taste tomorrow's touch
through the fresh scars
of yesterday

Forever far enough
to make me ever ache
for any way to dull
the edge of never

Yet the knife of never
forever sharpens itself
and bloods me daily
before sheathed in silence

~ ~ ~

Emotion
02/27/06 by hugo_sam in Lost in the '70's
The feeling of dispair and longing come forth strongly. Moving in it's simplicity. Well done. Hugo

Ouch!
02/27/06 by MistressJett
Damn, sweetie. I know that feeling all too well, and I understand how much it hurts. You put it into words very well. *hugs*

It's this part...
02/27/06 by Belegon in SoCal
...that is the clincher. "Ever close enough to taste tomorrow's touch" If all hope would finally vanish, if things were allowed to fade to memory, then that knife would dull. But to allow that to happen is against our obstinate nature. Beautiful words, mon ami.

wonderful read!
02/27/06 by oregon_gal
full of the stuff that keeps us on the edge.

ouch
02/27/06 by 4degrees
i know this kind of blade good write, hard i know. curt

Dark
03/03/06 by vampiredust
but beautiful. We all feel like this sometimes and you've described it wonderfully. Great read!

~~
03/04/06 by LeBroz in _NY - too far from Atlanta
A word A feeling; Both powerful weapons.

powerful....
03/05/06 by dcpoet44
nuff said......nicely done......don

mute

giving, always giving
never asking someone
(not just anyone)
for love
for me --
just me.

needing
to be a priority
to someone
(not just anyone)

but

afraid that someone
(not just anyone)
would rather leave
than sacrifice anything
for me

and

unable to tell someone
(not just anyone)
what i crave --
for wondering
if it was freely given

or

borrowed against love
would cheapen the gift
and leave the true need
unfulfilled.

thus

my silence
is ever an invitation
for someone
(not just anyone)
to read my heart.

~ ~ ~

Givers and Takers
04/07/05 by The_Fool
Hard sometimes to know whether you can ask for love and get something back that is as honest as love freely given without the hint. As far as style, I was trouble at first by the someone (not just anyone phrasing, but the more I read it, the more I liked it because of the rhythmic repetition.

Spoke to me
04/07/05 by CrimsonMaiden
I can relate to the words of this poem. You say it so eloquently. :)

Mute...
04/07/05 by Bridget69 in Canada
speaks volumes about the silent need to be noticed and loved.

Imp~
04/07/05 by Anonymous
this is lovely. The title is perfect. ~Syn

A consumate rendition
04/08/05 by matriarch
of that sometimes overpowering yearning, that desire for someone (not just anyone) to love you........it resonates deeply inside me, and echoes my own enforced mute state. A powerful, yet gentle piece. Mat xxxx

Beautifully Non-traditional...
04/08/05 by Belegon in Southern California
...and a solid piece about the uncertainties we all face in relationships both old and new, casual and formal, defined and open to interpretation. This resonates within me.

I know what you mean
04/08/05 by rikaaim in Ohio, USA
Because I'm on the other side of your poem I know what you mean. I am the "not just anyone". Sadly. I hope your "not just anyone" sees how special you really are and does decide to sacrafice anything for you. I have made that choice for my special someone and have never been happier. I know they would do the same for me and your poem shows the same in you. You would sacrafice anything for this person. You express perfectly the emotions as well as the imagery of what your trying to convey. The format lends itself well to your point...allowing the reader short intermissions to really "think" about what you are saying. By leaving in the small gaps, one can't overlook any of the detail your trying to impress. Well done.

you really
04/08/05 by Anonymous
touched close to home with this one...very well done. Sabina

Beautiful
04/08/05 by LadyJeanne
Your work never fails to reach me. I can identify with the silence - not wanting to ask, fearing to ask, hoping you don't have to ask - and the belief that love is, or should be, freely given. Thanks, Imp. LJ

beautifully written
04/08/05 by sophia jane
I relate to this completely. Well done, Imp!

Not just anyone...
04/08/05 by Wanton Vixxxen in Misty eyed in Pennsy...
could write this exquisite piece and make it reach out from the screen and tug at the heart like you can, imp. I still feel the heart's strings pulling as I write the comment. Simply beautiful! Vixxx

not just anyone ...
04/08/05 by My Erotic Tail
could write such a masterpiece, a real pearl of a poem, I am totally impressed

*
04/09/05 by Anonymous
Painful, lonely and gray is this work. Lost in the pugatory of a desperate voice... powerful in the simplicity of the desires that all hold so close to their souls.. very well done Imp.. Du Lac~

**
12/22/05 by Miss Oatlash
The last stanza left me breathless.

I can relate
02/20/07 by angelicminx in love with the man of my dreams
My silence has been broken, however, because I have found my someone (not just anyone)... or should I say he's found me. :) ~Minx

false pretenses

life's coarser intercourse
oft leads us in directions best
left untraveled
roads fraught with peril
to heart and soul
stealing tomorrow
from the jaws of today
truth lies in the soft
sighs of passion, the warmth
of a word and skin shared
without remorse we leave
only the shell of past pretenses
and the faint hope that our
hours will bleed no more

~ ~ ~

Beautiful
04/11/06 by vella_ms
all the way round each word. wonderfully expressed.

nice!
04/11/06 by cloudy
I loved this: "stealing tomorrow from the jaws of today." Exactly what some of us do. Nice work.

fabulous...
04/11/06 by ABSTRUSE
but I expect no less. Abs.

soft
04/11/06 by 4degrees
sighs passion me reminder again of truths, lies and make believe just don't convince me so much anymore. nice poem ma'am. curt

Elegantly expressed.
04/11/06 by Liar
I love that end... "... we leave only the shell of past pretenses and the faint hope that our hours will bleed no more"

Very nice
04/11/06 by neonurotic
I agree with your commenter, Liar. The end of this poem shines. Good work!

~~
04/11/06 by LeBroz in —NY - too far from Atlanta
Typical~no matter the name~always writing in such high quality, leaving the rest of the pretend poets struggling to meet the bar you always set so high.

Lovely
04/11/06 by Honey123
poem, gorgeous! this part: "roads fraught with peril to heart and soul" gave me such a pang in the middle of my tummy... ~Hony

Just put me down....
04/11/06 by sandspike
for what everyone has already written. Good JOB.

Nicely Done
04/11/06 by McKenna
You had me at "life's coarser intercourse..." At first reading, the lack of punctuation threw me; on the second and subsequent readings, I find it flows just fine without. I liked the imagery created with word combinations and pairs like "jaws of today" and "skin shared." I'm curious about the use of "hours [that]will bleed no more." You convey so much in so few lines; your talent is obvious. You tell just enough, but not too much. Nicely done.

No false pretenses about this!
04/12/06 by Wanton Vixxxen in reading perfection confection in Pa
This poem plunges to the core of the soul. If I had to choose one line from this poem it would be...uhhh...uhmmm... no, it would be impossible for Me to choose just one line Alessia. Each word married with the next and agreeing with another commentator, no punctuation would have enhanced this piece one bit. It is pure perfection! Vixxx

^
12/06/06 by Bill Dada
Ya, what they said. Very nice.

beautiful
01/18/07 by vella_ms
how easily you wove your words to simply state feelings, i think, we've all had before. god, i marvel at your talent.

Beautiful
03/26/07 by maggot420
Wonderfully written little gem. I love this.

need

i could easily get it from her:
(com)passion
and understanding
and love

i could even get it from
*shudder*
him
sans understanding, anyway

i can't get it from them
they're far too young
to even want it
outside themselves

i could get it here
to some degree
from some (ir)regulars
who understand peripherally

but it's not only the what
that i need
it's the who, too
i want it from you

~ ~ ~

very good!
12/08/04 by WickedEve
Love this phrase: (com)passion

Very clever!
12/08/04 by postobitum
I really liked the *shudder*, for some reason in that context it made me think of back hair! lmao, good job!

Imp---impressive~
12/08/04 by Du Lac in usA
Imp.. I really liked this.. I can picture you sitting there and the faces of the ones you mention rolling thru your mind. the thoughts shared by so many.. spoken by so few... I felt you swimming in my mind.. great identification! That is a sure sign of good poems... when another says... yes.. yes..! Smiling for your prose was beautiful and clever! du Lac

your love song~
12/08/04 by My Erotic Tale
Ahhh heck, that was absolutely the best love song I have ever heard...oh ... I meant poem~ Impressed as always, each poem out impresses the next, very Impressive~

:)
12/08/04 by Maria2394
I really enjoyed this, the set up, the end, and the way you wove the "other" words in, good job :)

(Com)pact --
12/09/04 by foehn
rich, clear, beautifully woven and a bit sad. I see "want" in the verse, and "need" is the title, and I sigh, nodding agreement.

Shit...
12/09/04 by she_is_my_addiction in Bed
that's awesome. You have an amazing poetic voice! Good work!

Echos
12/09/04 by matriarch
so strongly in my own heart. I felt every word, every yearning syllable. As always your words touch the core.

Coin Toss
12/14/04 by Anonymous in U S of A
Flipped a coin for the rating. It generously came up to the higher of the two ratings. Not sure I agree.

Coin Toss ...
12/14/04 by Crapola in U S of A
... on whether or not you're an idiot. You lost.

I saw layers in this
12/14/04 by LadyJeanne
Gave me a wistful feeling on the first read - so many things matter for it to feel right! Then, it struck me as bold and pointed - yes, my needs can be filled elsewhere, but I choose you to do it. I'll be wondering which it is.

Great...
04/22/05 by Sub Joe
Really liked it, imp.

Not.......
04/22/05 by ABSTRUSE
Crapola. I think you've struck a chord in all of us.

~
11/27/05 by Bill Dada
Words that dance with feelings that haven't been asked to dance in a long time. ty,bd