repose under the raspberry blush
of a veiled aperture
dawn's kiss parts draped night
bringing day in diffusion
pierced by the shudder speed
of stilled loving;
a shutter sped on vocal lengths
breathless interlude captured;
freeze framed in naked contrast
and ambient wonder
tastes of shadow and sunlight
on sheets and skin
in the peppermint blink of mind's eye
forget not
the monochromatic simplicity
seen through passion's lens
on a stolen Sunday morning
~ ~ ~
11/22/05 by vella_ms
how i know that feeling! wonderfully conveyed. Keep it up! v~
11/22/05 by Anonymous
I really liked this. Thanks. Curiouswife
11/22/05 by sack in USA
this one was brilliant!
11/22/05 by sack in USA
this one was brilliant! (and you deserved 100, not 50, my mistake!)
11/23/05 by Bill Dada
In the 'peppermint blink of mind's eye' I gave it a 5. ty,bd
11/24/05 by hugo_sam in Lost in the '70's
What a wonderful expression of the capture of that moment: fulfilment and satisfaction. Well Done
11/26/05 by dcpoet44
even though the title wasn't an eye grabber, the rest of sure did.
11/27/05 by Belegon in SoCal
the way you use monochromatic and hint at black and white while also using things like "raspberry" & "peppermint" that hint at color...
11/27/05 by yui
"stilled life in darkness poised" I love that line. It has the bones of something great in it. Well done!
11/27/05 by sophia jane
"peppermint blink" is an excellent phrase! Another great poem
08/11/07 by lucky-E-leven
Artfully told from the eye of a camera; it's the perfection of the moment that makes me want to never forget a single detail. You captured that nicely here. I'd be happy for the chance to Memorize you.
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