drifting

captivatingly cruel
she draws my eye
frigid yet frail

sun-drenched distraction
oblivious to her
blinding beauty

perilously pristine
peppermint pane-cicles
drip drop from frozen lips

crystal blood
from an icy heart
on ivory eaves

so like my hope
melting in the winter
of passion's promise

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02/01/05 by WickedEve
This is a very good poem! This is cool line: peppermint pane-cicles

A creative
02/01/05 by neonurotic
interesting metaphor, with fresh phrasing. Enjoyed.

I must admit
02/01/05 by minsue
this was my pick of the monthly contest poems, though I had no idea it was yours. Well done, Imp! (in case you haven't heard, I'm a whore for alliteration...)

Tweedly-neat!
02/01/05 by DeepAsleep
Enjoyed this! Clever alliteration always makes me grin, and as has already been said, it's a neat little metaphor. However, I had a question about this stanza: sun-drenched distraction oblivious to her blinding beauty The line break from second to third line feels off kilter, to me, maybe because the third line doesn't feel like a complete thought. My brain kept binding here, in rereads, so I thought I'd point at it and look confused. Loved it, on the whole! ~D.A.

Nice to see this out and about.
02/02/05 by sandspike
I'd said this is IMPRESSIVE....but u already knew that. Drifting was my favorite.

Sigh ...
02/03/05 by cookiejar in USA
To write poetry like this is a gift. Wonderful Imp!

Hook!
02/03/05 by vella_ms
Isn't that what you say? especially loved: "...crystal blood from an icy heart on ivory eaves..." beautiful.

drifting~
02/03/05 by My Erotic Tale
Impressive~ I too picked this poem I am impressed, had no idea who wrote it but I loved it, ...drifting an excellent #1 POEM for Janurary chilling I meant drifting~ great job~

Mmm, baby!
02/05/05 by mismused
Pane-cicles? Passion in the winter gone awry? Do I remember correctly? Wonderful poem, Imp. A professional writer expanding her realm. I like.