greener grass breathes
a fertile caress of promise
within bluest fields deep
passion‛s prayer blooms
with wild flowering surrender
within bluest fields deep
succulent steel bows
to sate ravenous hope
within bluest fields deep
haunting hunger blurs
the feral lines of convention
within bluest fields deep
crystalline chaos burns
into naked imagination
sizzling dreams thaw my nights
within the magnetic pools
of bluest fields deep
~ ~ ~
passion‛s prayer blooms
12/13/04 by vella_ms
I love that. excellent poem, Imp...cant wait for more. Please, continue. v~
evocative!
12/13/04 by sack
like the "Crystalline chaos" line!! The last stanza doesn't have quite as smooth a rhythm as the others. Otherwise, very haunting and lovely!
Beautiful structure
12/13/04 by flyguy69
I love the way this flows, imp; very melodic.
Impressive...
12/13/04 by My Erotic Tale
has done it again... this is awesome...spiraling downward with poetic style that impressive is so good at...great poem,,, deep~
mentioned
12/14/04 by WickedEve
on the new poems review thread.
Bluest Fields is truly deep
12/16/04 by Awful Arthur
I love the use of repeated alliteration. Fantastic poem.
OMGosh
12/17/04 by Lisa Denton in USA
The picture painted in my mind with the phrase "within bluest fields deep" is beautiful, thank you.
I've always enjoyed...
12/18/04 by Belegon in Southern California
...this form despite a notable lack of success in my own usage. It creates the feeling that you are expanding multiple views on a single theme and is very effective here.
Hypnotic
01/02/05 by minsue
and simply lovely
P U
03/22/05 by Anonymous
within bluest fields deep greener grass breathes a fertile caress of promise sounds like someone has been sniffing manure
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12/04/06 by LeBroz in — NY - too far from Atlanta
Simple & complex alliteration ~ well done.
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03/17/07 by LeBroz
This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 35,000 poems.
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