Knead

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Below are the public comments left by readers while the first draft of Knead was posted on Literotica:

Nice one Alessia
02/20/06 by rgraham666 in Canada
I really liked the journey of the narrator, how she changed during the course of this short piece. And the little touches, like the sock, added a very nice fillip of realism to it. Nicely done.

Sweet.
02/20/06 by MistressJett
This is a very sweet piece. It pulled me right in - I could almost feel myself in that little room. :)

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02/20/06 by sophia jane
Very well done and descriptive. Now I have to go get myself a massage, too.

Artistry
02/20/06 by hugo_sam in Lost in the '70's
How thoroughly enjoyable. You turned what could be the mundane into a journey of infinite possibilities. Moving, engrossing and well done. Thank you Hugo

Wonderful and insightful
02/20/06 by huelust in usa
This was written in such a beautiful, clear voice. I'm a bodywork therapist, and I really appreciated the way you conveyed the intimacy of touch and the sensitivity of the practitioner to navigate emotional boundaries. Wonderful!

Sensual and Erotic
03/03/06 by Belegon in Southern California
...and without any sex too...and this? "Is there any love deeper than the absence of fear?" *shiver* What a great line!

It takes me...
01/13/07 by inlovewithyourghost in USA
...to places I love to travel. Thank you for the journey. It's a beautiful story.

It was me...
01/13/07 by Fallenfromgrace in London
who was on that table. It was me. You made me feel like it was anyway. Wonderful, absolutely flawless motion from touch to thought, fear to tranquility. Wonderful.


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Painted into a Corner

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Down on the Beach

Withdrawn for paid publication. Sorry.

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push

it's over
abundance of will waning
weightless tug of worth
push pinning hopes
pining away
pulling - back and forth
through days free
falling through the wisp
per wants born naked
in dark nested need
full, filling the still life
less touch and go; story
dying before our berth

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Compact
06/17/06 by Liar
Almost overwhelmingly compact language. It takes focus to follow. But damn, worth it.

nice write
06/17/06 by My Erotic Trail
I enjoyed your poem (~_~)

I agree with Liar
06/19/06 by Belle_Ringer in USA
This is incredibly compact, dense I would even call it. I will have to read it many times to realize all I want in it.

I will be coming back to this one.
07/08/06 by
I would call it more mercury than lead--shifting sinuously from meaning to meaning, depending on the temperature of the reader.

Deep
07/08/06 by Awful Arthur
So deep that it may be bottomless. I found something new in each line every time I read it over again. At first, I thought that I was finding unintended meanings and effects but upon further readings, I think not--I'm finding very little of all that is there. I was particularly struck by the lines, "weightless tug of worth" and "dying before our berth" and the unjoined "wisp per."

an astonishingly good example....
07/09/06 by sack in USA
of "less is more!"

Short, sweet....
02/01/07 by Amyfriend in Ontario, Canada
and incredibly good.

Shout for Silence!

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