Journey

in the buoyant waters of hope, I
float
on the potential for a love that has the power to
tame
the persistent undertow of futility

currents of inky desire
swirl
in the turbulent vortex of my mind as your eyes
sparkle
with unspoken passion

no longer content to simply
drift
upon the sinuous waves of synchronous dreams, I
swim
against the tides of convention

silently begging you to
take
my hands and my heart and my hope, I
crash
upon the shores of your torment

while I did not
choose
to love you, I would not now
change
to avoid the roiling seas of controversy

fear thrives only on the surface, we finally
discover,
when with wonder we
dive
into the tranquil depths of our future

~ ~ ~

imp,
11/07/04 by
Good!

Loved it
11/07/04 by vella_ms
'a ship on the ocean, your anchor cast upon the rocky shore.' thank you, imp, for sharing those feelings in such an eloquent manner. great job! *hugs* v~

Stunning
11/08/04 by matriarch
I'm a sucker, firstly for portrayals of deep emotions, secondly for expressive language and extensive use of vocabulary, and thirdly, writing that combines those two and leaves me speechless with admiration. You got me, hook, line and sinker. Mat

nice effort
11/08/04 by Belegon in Southern California
Sometimes the simplest parts leap out at me. The passage that connects with where I am at the most right now is this: "while I did not choose to love you, I would not now change"

Great Stuff
11/09/04 by Goldie Munro
I really liked this - I loved the structure, imagery and emotion - well done!

And it is
11/09/04 by Honey123 in USA
I know you where you are coming from with this poem...I love it - it's like you are in my head. Great job!! Honey

Very nice
11/09/04 by flyguy69
I enjoyed this one, impressive; very nice imagery. The line breaking was a bit disruptive to me- it seemed to halt the flow of a very liquid poem.

Impressive indead~
11/13/04 by My Erotic Tale
a poetic icon and very inspirational, a witty and clever poet with a very good flare for hitting the heart string painting two beautiful pictures with one poem~ Art~

*sigh*
11/14/04 by lucky-E-leven in Texas, USA
Very stirring poem, having achieved the very difficult task of being applicable to a great many situations. I loved it. ~lucky

Amazing
08/28/05 by Bill Dada
when with wonder we dive into the tranquil depths of our future I think this is the third poem of yours that I've read and they all have kick ass endings. And beginnings and middles and everything else.