repose under the raspberry blush
of a veiled aperture
dawn's kiss parts draped night
bringing day in diffusion
pierced by the shudder speed
of stilled loving;
a shutter sped on vocal lengths
breathless interlude captured;
freeze framed in naked contrast
and ambient wonder
tastes of shadow and sunlight
on sheets and skin
in the peppermint blink of mind's eye
forget not
the monochromatic simplicity
seen through passion's lens
on a stolen Sunday morning
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Lovely
11/22/05 by vella_ms
how i know that feeling! wonderfully conveyed. Keep it up! v~
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11/22/05 by Anonymous
I really liked this. Thanks. Curiouswife
no many poems about cameras....
11/22/05 by sack in USA
this one was brilliant!
not many poems about cameras....
11/22/05 by sack in USA
this one was brilliant! (and you deserved 100, not 50, my mistake!)
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11/23/05 by Bill Dada
In the 'peppermint blink of mind's eye' I gave it a 5. ty,bd
Captured
11/24/05 by hugo_sam in Lost in the '70's
What a wonderful expression of the capture of that moment: fulfilment and satisfaction. Well Done
well done......
11/26/05 by dcpoet44
even though the title wasn't an eye grabber, the rest of sure did.
I love...
11/27/05 by Belegon in SoCal
the way you use monochromatic and hint at black and white while also using things like "raspberry" & "peppermint" that hint at color...
Lovely
11/27/05 by yui
"stilled life in darkness poised" I love that line. It has the bones of something great in it. Well done!
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11/27/05 by sophia jane
"peppermint blink" is an excellent phrase! Another great poem
Adore the Sentiment
08/11/07 by lucky-E-leven
Artfully told from the eye of a camera; it's the perfection of the moment that makes me want to never forget a single detail. You captured that nicely here. I'd be happy for the chance to Memorize you.
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