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Thursday, February 15, 2007

acid pain

a rancid vein
of disappointment
slowly pollutes
the currents of love's river

its rain of words
spreads viscid stain
eating the precious
mental armor of hope

only time can distill
the fetid bane
healing the burn
of emotional corrosion

until again it reigns
peels skin from scar
searing the soul
in acid pain

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5Very, very ..
02/17/07 by Amyfriend in Ontario, Canada

interesting poem and certainly leaves food for thought..exceptionally well done.

5some very
02/17/07 by 4degrees

hard words here. also, some of me personal favorite words...you did great in conveying this feeling of anguish. excellent po ma'am. curt

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02/17/07 by LeBroz in — NY - too far from Atlanta

Powerfully written with carefully chosen words that force an image of pain, healing, and rebirth.

5really good
02/17/07 by champagne1982

Your choices eat at my mind's eye as I visualize each image you present in this poem. An excellent read.

5wow
02/17/07 by SelenaKittyn

I can feel this one.

5Brilliant
02/19/07 by vella_ms

My favorite line: "mental armor of hope" Silly, to pick a line and roll with it but this one grabbed at me and won't let go.

5^
04/27/07 by Bill Dada

Very powerful. I especially liked 'emotional corrosion' and the last three lines.

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