of disappointment
slowly pollutes
the currents of love's river
its rain of words
spreads viscid stain
eating the precious
mental armor of hope
only time can distill
the fetid bane
healing the burn
of emotional corrosion
until again it reigns
peels skin from scar
searing the soul
in acid pain
~ ~ ~
Very, very ..
02/17/07 by Amyfriend in Ontario, Canada
interesting poem and certainly leaves food for thought..exceptionally well done.
some very
02/17/07 by 4degrees
hard words here. also, some of me personal favorite words...you did great in conveying this feeling of anguish. excellent po ma'am. curt
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02/17/07 by LeBroz in — NY - too far from Atlanta
Powerfully written with carefully chosen words that force an image of pain, healing, and rebirth.
really good
02/17/07 by champagne1982
Your choices eat at my mind's eye as I visualize each image you present in this poem. An excellent read.
wow
02/17/07 by SelenaKittyn
I can feel this one.
Brilliant
02/19/07 by vella_ms
My favorite line: "mental armor of hope" Silly, to pick a line and roll with it but this one grabbed at me and won't let go.
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04/27/07 by Bill Dada
Very powerful. I especially liked 'emotional corrosion' and the last three lines.
