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Hmmm12/15/06 by Anonymous
What?
Huh!12/15/06 by Anonymous
What the?
Regret.12/15/06 by duddle146 in USA
Regret after a night of passion.
Well heres my problem with what written12/15/06 by Risq_001
While the author may have had some idea of where they wanted this tidbit to go, there isn't enough here for myself, and a few others, to understand what the author wanted to convey. Confusion might have been part of what was trying to be conveyed. If not, then confusion is the only thing I got from this. Not enough of anything else for me to understand what the author was trying to say about what this characters motivation was. -Risq
You've shared enough details12/15/06 by Nirvanadragones
for the reader to be able to figure out the necesarry. But even so, this piece is not about the detail, or the events. The raw emotion of that daily battle with Self is perfectly portraid. Love does that - makes us question not only our own motivations and actions, but it makes us question our innermost being. When fear and dishonesty is part of your journey, hope hurts. And the battle to be true to ourselves continues - day after day, dream after dream, one breath at a time. Thank you for helping me see this.
Brilliant.12/15/06 by Anonymous
This is so powerful, so emotional and intense. This came from the soul. A snippet inside ones head. A cleansing. Simply amazing...I get it.
I?12/15/06 by z00time in USA
I kicked the water. I smelled the tire. we ran backwards. The ball is cubed. 179 degrees. There. My comment is as understandable as the story.
She new it in her heart,12/15/06 by Anonymous
I rest my case
I read it! Then I re read it and read it again!!12/15/06 by NeedYou
I still haven't the sightest idea if thhis was a story about a man or woman who chaeted or watched his/her spouse cheat. Did he/she know about it/didn't know but wondered? Was it planned by him/her or was it something he/she did and was caught by the husband/wife? Was it a man/woman relationship or a gay one. Was it done by him/her with a him/her? It read as if he/she was in pain fromwhat happened that was for sure. But I'm not sure why there was pain? There was puke and wine and food but I have no idea where he/she ate it. Was the act done before he/she left home and was it the husband/wife who stayed and watched him/her leave? Was it he/she that didn't close the door? Was it him/her that left and went to the hotel for an hour. And WHY did he/she go there? Why an hour? Who did he/she call before he/she arrived at the hotel. Was it there that he/she fucked him/her or was it before he/she left the house? I have no fucking idea and neither does anyone else who read this. I hope the aurthor whoever it is he/she will be inspired to write another chapter and this time "TELL US SOMETHING!!!"
Congratulations!12/15/06 by Anonymous in USA
Congratulations, not to the author, but to the anonymous who "got it" and thought it was brilliant. I didn't have the vaguest idea of what the writers point was in this story other than that someone was in shock and geieving. How and why is ,to me, a mysery. Sorry I'm not bright enough to "get it". 60 year old George
I liked it12/15/06 by AutumnWriter in USA
I disagree with the negative comments. The purpose of the author was to force the reader to pick up bits and pieces and read between the lines. A good story doesn't have to line it up like ABC. I suggest trying to go with what the author was trying to do, instead of fighting it. I think that I understood the storyline, but I won't state it here because that would be against the author's purpose. I enjoy creative and original pieces and this was one.
Excellent story12/15/06 by Alvaron53
Superb prose with excellent word choices. The author's sparse style lends an edginess, a raw quality to the telling. Normally the lack of dialog would cripple a story but it doesn't here since the plotline's conflict is internalized in the narrator. The author tells us next to nothing about the characters in the story yet we know who they are. The cheating husband and the other woman only she's a woman of conscience and that leads us to the story's plot. Her ending the months long affair after they got caught is emotionally painful but at the same time, she knows it's a move toward a healthier emotional life. The acceptance of ending it is the resolution of the story's conflict and it's well-handled by the author's compact prose. I'm sorry some of the other commentators didn't get the story. I agree with AutumnWriter: the gold is there if you pan for it. Excellent fiction this is. This 100's for you, implexity, for a story well-told. I thank you.
totally confusing12/15/06 by Anonymous
sounds like zen buddism type. I could not figure out what it's all about. plese help me understand. well written about ???
Impressively Veiled & Written12/15/06 by Anonymous in Sumwhere Else
Well I felt it but had to read it again to be sure. Succinctly, her married lover asked her to participate with his one and nonely whereas the truant officer wouldn't pay for the rose which felt wrong but satisfying to some except for the cat who we never heard from but understood why but the dog didn't either so - well you get the drift. It was either that or like the interpretive two below detailed - or not. I very much look forward to the all revealing chapter 3.5 wherein all is spelled out for me and most. Still I liked it such as it was - provoking another drink or more. Sometimes the camo is too effective Author
for a little trashy piece of jerry spring12/15/06 by Anonymous
I guess it is "deep" enough,,, don't misunderstand me, I am an observer of people and cultures, so even Jerry Springer-type issues are relevant and "important" to me, even if people try to make fun of them,,, they really reveal what people do, what they think, how they think, when you lift all the facades, fakes, veils, what-not. Unfortunately, this was NOT a story. It's an attempt at some deep, clever, "succinct" moment rendition (the rendition of a fleeting exchange between two masochistic people who are saying good bye to each other, still calling one another "baby" when it's just a phrase that they have no problem use it on a dirty pig or dog they see in the street,,, But for the "deep thinkers", readers, hey, go ahead and rate it "100" and put some exclamation marks after it. Just allow those of us who think it is not worth much to also say what we think... No hard feelings...
?No Tip?12/15/06 by Anonymous
You were not as you wished disturbed correct?I would say all things concidered this is indeed a classic bedtime story it sure put me to sleep.PAX
Moral considerations: Naught Necessary12/16/06 by KOLKORE in USA
It went well up to the last minute, and then the ending pretty much killed the story for me. A moment of truth happened. OK, she is moving along: shock and initial adjustment. She is realizing the true nature of the relations; we read good accounting of internal conflicts with the insight that she should have listened to her gut feeling all along. So as the somewhat overly dramatic ex partner for this affair is getting ready to make her exit from the hotel and from the story – I was hit by the most devastating comment from her. She does not nod apathetically, in response to the receptionist’s belated announcement, she bitterly bites: “Too bad you didn't get a chance to deliver them before I left." OMG, is she telling us that had she received the messages on time they could have saved their hopeless affair? Why else would she say: “too bad”? Now that’s really too bad, but from a very different perspective. Up to this point I believed in her internal monolog: that she was relieved – resolution- her gut feeling told her etc. In other words, that she had some shred of moral fiber in her. Ooops, she does not, just opportunism, and a lot of self serving rationalizations. Per characterization though, it was very successful. I am sure there are at least some people like those two “lovers” of opportunity. What bothers me though is that I am just not sure that the author actually meant or felt any need to add to her very apt descriptions, any angel, even a shade of irony or a critical view in describing the woman (being a partner to an affair). For example, she is never caught having any empathy for the betrayed woman. But as this self centered mentality is typical, you can count this as another plus to the character depiction. Call me old fashion, I am still disturbed by people who are not burdened by the extra weight of conscience, be it in characters in stories or people in real life.
I don't mind being called stupid12/16/06 by Kanga40
for admitting I have no idea what this is about. I definitely didn't 'get it', in fact I doubt if there is an 'it' to get. A wonderful example of a situation where an author with a great idea actually manged to get none of that idea into words.
There must be something wrong with me, I actually12/16/06 by sack in USA
understood this. As a matter of fact, it was painfully clear throughout. The author has an impressive way of distilling the emotions of a complex situation into very believable actions/reactions. Sure, there are details we'll never know, especially what lead up to the present situation. Yet, I found myself needing to read every word of ths subtle masterpiece, every scrap of info., every clue, no matter how minute. Few, if anyone can achieve "less is more" with the smoothness of this author. Well above the typical story with this overused theme!
